Author's note: This poem is written as Hyde's anger takes over. In
Jekyll and Hyde it was obvious Hyde was evil and angry so I wrote my
final poem about anger and the affects it has on us. In the end there is
no cure for anger and it will slowly kill us. At the end there is hope
for Baptism and new life, but the anger always finds a way so that's why
the blood drowned me in the poem.
Anger flames up inside
Monsters burn my soul
Control blows away in the wind
Madness sets in
The storm starts to thrash
I slip into the dark corners of my mind
The darkness swallows me whole
The light proclaims my flaws
Sorrow strangles my throat
Screams suffocate my voice
Mirrors contort my body
Death beckons me closer
So on fire
So close to hell
When I see water appear
The deep sea has come to save me
I run towards the new life I am about to receive
Plunge into the gift of my renewal
But with a sudden burst into the pool
I realize I have immersed myself into blood
It suffocates me and takes my breath from my lungs
It squeezes my body & pushes me down
Drowning me further and further
Until I am at the bottom of the darkness with no way up
And there I lay until death sweeps my life out from under me
There is no escape; anger always finds a way
Wow I cant believe that no one has commented on this piece. It is so good! Your diction is crazy amazing and fits so well. When you wrote,
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Screams suffocate my voice
Mirrors contort my body
Death beckons me closer"
your word choice was perfect and really added emotion to the piece. This is so strong and your writing ability is so good. I can tell it comes from deep in your heart and you just spill out all that you are feeling.
The one thing to consider would be a variety in phrase length to add more affect and fluency. Nice job girl!
Holy nuts! This is sooooooooo good Maggie! Seriously I wish I could write like this! Your word choice is amazing and I can really feel the emotion that you put in throughout the piece! Great jobb(:
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